Speech about the Olympic I was EXCITING.???

We have been learning to write and present our speeches. We had to persuade the audience to think our way. The Olympics was our theme.
The criteria we had to use to write and present our speech included, an introduction, delivery, content and our conclusion.

1. I am learning  to do some powerful writing and doing  a specific  writing as well.
2. I am learning to do a introduction in the beginning.

I think my introduction was kind of good but it wasn't in order and some of it didn't make any sense.

I think I should of checked my work before I had read it out and I should of read it to see if it  made sense and that it was in order.

I think that my voice was good but my speech didn't have enough information.

I think I have to change my sentences and add more information to make it great for the audience that want to read it.  I think that they will like it now because I changed some of the things that I did wrong in my speech.
In conclusion  think my voice was kind of great but I needed to speak a bit louder  and add more information.

Netbook Received

On the 25Th of July Glen Innes  school had  a Netbook launch day.

I was so excited because all the class's received there netbook  at the hall and all people and all parent were so surprise that they saw there child netbook  and when they saw it the netbook and that was the big suprise that they saw what was it like.  I was so happy  that we got to get our netbook and we went on it and started to play in it on the first day we had got our netbook and everyone had opened their netbook and started to play on it and that was the exciting thing that had happened in the whole school.

Horses

I like horses because they can take you for a ride and they are really nice. It is cool to have a horse to look after . I wish I could have a horse because I saw a horse up at my aunty's house and it was so good to have a horse with me.

I wish that I could have lots of horses because I really like the way that they move.  They can be very strong a because they help us by pulling wagons.

Brave Lion Scared Lion

Title: Brave Lion Scared Lion
Author: Joan Stimson
Illustrated: Meg Rutherford

1. I think you should read this book called the Brave lion and the Scared Lion. It is all about  twins that go to the water hole and the brother wanders all around. The little  baby lion was scared  because he was too  shy to get down from the tree. The little lion wanted  to  be brave  like his mum and dad. The twins were not to go next to the water hole but they still went next to the water hole.

About cat and dog

Kia Ora every one I just want to say that I like cat because  some times  it follow me around and dog they a really cute because they don't bite and even cat they just like your sock because it fell smooth and so soft to touch and they like chasing you around the places and cat a really helpful and they are always kind to other.And cats they are really nice to be with and they can be your cat when you look after it and it belongs to you  and you can pay with the dog and the cat and they can lick you on the face and their claws are nice and soft to be on your face and I would like to have a cat because I can have a pet to be with me because I don't have a pet at my house and cat are so gentle and respectful and you can look after and share with.
And I hope you read my story about cat and dogs.

a birthday card for Mrs boyer

Hi my name is Evelyn and I just want to say that our teacher is so happy to see every one that came to say happy birthday to her. We all were hiding because it was her birthday today and we gave her a surprise. We were excited to hear that today is her birthday.

About king of Tonga.

Hi my name is Evelyn and I am sorry to hear that the king of Tonga has died and it very sad to hear about what happened to the king. We heard it on the news and that why we have to look after the world and support the king of Tonga. Hi King of Tonga I saw you on the news and they said that King of Tonga has died and there is  no one to take over the King spot.